this wasnt one of the best oms

but it was decent,the imagery was vivid,the emotion was ok,you expressed the events nicely,and the structure was ok besides the /*s u dont need those so take them out next time,the vocab was good,and the word use was blah coulda done a little better,the concept was good...not played at all....overall this was a decent but yet good peace.......keep em coming


7.5/10

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