Reflecting on life, awakening to visions of the aftermath earths doom is ripe
Heavens neglected the strife; ultimate decisions from above, leave mankind to die
I don’t cry, I see the positivity unmistakeably now, amongst the deathly corrosion
Finally free to fly, beneath me opens an abyss; spirits break free to add to the confusion
Underground explosions shaking earth off its axis, nuclear shockwaves reverb on the surface
Thunder resounding heavily, lightning penetrating blowing mass boulders, part of the purpose
Crowds disperse, losing their minds like wicked clowns in a circus, its fuckin crazy
It amazes me how mankind would kill off generations in a lifetime in the evilest way
Chemical warfare, nation against nation, throw in some suicide bombers for scare
Are u unaware how fucked up it is the way we living? all taking no giving…
Poor starved children despair, getting desperate all they got is the air they breathe in
Minimal intake, keep to residual, throw some scraps at em like 1 percent of U.S income
Now we flipping, the earth is giving in to the ripping death tolls n neglected thanks given
Call it compensation, spitting flames of fire from the core this is natural devastation
Let me say im glad, happy to be leaving this place that’s been disgraced, oh the laws of karma
Quick to disarm ya, u fight it with all ya might receive it justly and let it calm ya
The sky darkens my mind fastens on some unfinished business I’ll try before my time passes
Pay respects to my mother say my last goodbyes to my sisters and brother
From one to another it’s a shame my siblings, robbed of the time to discover
Themselves and put a name to the cover, its all ends in a world of disaster
Ahh, admiring the design, im laughing it off the way its affecting me, infecting my mind
Seeing explosions on the horizon, overcoming the darkness with overwhelming shine..
This must be it, the final blow that ends time once and for all im going blind
Uttering my last words………shhhh listen as Earth and space merge.
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Trauma,good verse, nice imaginary, no flow, the struture is what you've totally lacked. You had creativity i can picture this happening in my mind, but i'd sense a little bit expressions in your verse. Vocab is truly 100% good in your verse.




The echo in my head, the doctor's feet...my pulse begins to race...
...The tension in my skin...the devilishly evil grin...on my examiner's face
"Well first I will give you the bad news...damn, I feel sorry for you..."
...I can see the false compassion his eyes...why is it so horribly cruel..?
"You are dying...and it gets worse...you have 24 hours, only a day..."
...I feel like weeping...If only I had one more year and just not today
The doctor takes an enevelope...takes it out, his hand inches close...
..."With this envelope...before you die, you can live your dreams and hopes..."
I look at the envelope...what secret magic happiness could be inside..?
...My heart sinks again...nothing that could make me last longer or survive
"Cheer up..." The doctor's smile appears on the clean-shaven chin...
..."This will allow you to create the wishes and ambitions that could have been."
No...I say to myself, that just would not be morally right...
...I wanna spend my time with Shayla, 'cause there is only tonight
I pick up my jacket...I head for the door, the doctor's voice is ringing...
...What the fuck have I wasted my life for, I wish I could go back to the beginning
In what seems like an instant...I am already home, why so quick...?
...I tell Shayla, but she laughs and smiles...like it was some sort of trick...
"No baby...I am dead serious..." Tears form in my eyes I embrace...
...I can feel the numbness in her body...I feel the tear roll down her face
"No baby...please...you can't leave me here, I will die if you go..."
...I release all of my tears...I squeeze harder, a sob escapes my throat...
We pull away...I cry harder as I see those green, tear filled eyes...
...She leans forwards and kisses me! To my own shocked, horrified surprise
I push away..."Shayla what have you done, now you will die too!"
...She falls to the ground crying..."I can never, ever live without you..."
I pick her up off the ground...I embrace her again, I wont release...
...I start to cry again...she sacrificed her life...she just obtained the disease
We decide to take a drive...we drive down by the river, we take our place...
...I look at Shayla's face...she's smiling...and it is like God's shining good grace
I sit there and lay down...until the sun goes down, but we dont move...
...The most romantic night of my life...here with Shayla under the sad moon
"Baby...do you think we will be together still? When we are in paradise..?"
...I tilt my head..."Death can't even stop us...we will still win the fight..."
A gentle raindrop lands on Shayla's head...another tear roll off her head...
...She buries her face into me..."I have to watch you go...I wish I went instead..."
I begin my weeping again..."It will be okay...trust me it wont be long..."
..."Baby...please...promise that you'll kill me now...before you are gone..."
My mouth is wide...but I reluctantly nod my head...It would ease her pain...
...I lift the rock...I give her a gentle kiss..."I love you...I will see you soon again..."

...Headlines: "Two Found Dead By River...Boyfriend Murders Girlfriend..."...
...It Was The Boyfriends Last 24 Hours...



limit-Very much creative, good verse with some good flow. Nice struture, with no vocab. word was tooo basic. The creativity of it was good. An topic tolled nicly done. The imagination was good, i can picture this happening in my head. overall good verse.


overall= Good drop from both heads but i have to go with Limit. He basically had good flow. He had harder expressions telling. Limit had some good creativity in his verse.Limit upp your vocab words was too basic on your verse. Trauma however didnt had flow. Trauma although you've had everything except flow and expressions. I didnt sense alot of expressions which made your verse really weak and non-readyable. I have to go with limit for good expressions and good flow.

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