man shit....thats some tight shit....very emotional and i feel the pain of you in hunger...your vocab was great and some good work with vocabulary...very good verse with creativty and wordplay...stucture was decent and the flow was fuckin dope...i see you gettin better n shit too...and you wrtie thsi dope shit up so quick and i also liked how you used my name in that line....haha...very good peice....keep working on your stuff cuz your multis were great in there with that vocab damn you so much better then me honestly keep your wokr up but my favorite line i eman bar without my name in it..would have to be:
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I'm still frightened..sounds silly..but everyday I get an ow feeling
physical and menatally..someone's negatively feeling me..
^^i jsut liekd how you used good multis..and dont tell me i dotn know multis cuz some cats jsut think its rhyming in more then one place but you need vocab to do that and you did...very well good peice homie...

no need to rate such dopiness...pz

you still owe me feed on my OM...its in the sig..please read to..