aight, you did some things right and some wrong
1st,I like anyone who loves rap enough to do an open mic..
so I'm actually proud of you and your crew for doin OM's

2nd..just fix your structure..try changing the font
and centering it..thats what I do...

big ups to you and LNL

3rd..just re word some of your lines
you used som ok phrases..but use more emotion
and I'll admit the cunt bubble line was funny
so you didn't do too bad..and plus your new

ps..

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