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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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Wow, this is a very good piece man, I really like your imagery on here, that was just amazing. Also the metaphor you had like the mice and the hawk, very nice. When you would talk about how the girl would just sit in one corner rocking back and forward with a glare, that part just amazed me because the way you explained it made me feel like I was watching a movie. You should really continue this man, or atleast show it to your teacher because it's one of the best auto-biographies i've read on here so far.. much prop's..
9/10
-Dabatos
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