honestly your gettin better...your stucture has gotten way better and you still flow good and now your starting to use more vocabulary and more decent lines with creativty good job tho honestly thats good...very creative and you like to write lots thats good...with a chorus n everything....good job but if you ever need real help with elevation i could help you
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favorite lines:
I don't know what's wrong wit you, is you my dude or a detective/
Try to look at it from your perspective/
^^good lines there good vocab and some emotion in there good line creative..
I'm finished wit ya, I hope and pray that you ain't bitter/
Used to have the goods, nowadays you don't deliver/
^^good stucture and it flowed well with some decent vocab and it was ight...good job..
-Parallel
return the favour in the sig...my alais is Parallel