this is ok, topic is allright. you could of explained things a bit better.

Try keeping your bar's the same length.

for instance.

Bout time u gets a life
cuz that'll ho slit ur throat wit a knife

^^
this bar is 16 syllable's long.


and who woulda guessed under all that make-up and braids
that she'll be carryin' a disease between her legs

^^
24 syllable's long.


so as time goes by
da symtoms just multiply
^^
12 syllable's
feel me?

if they ar eeven the flow will be alot better.
content is ok, could of elaberated alot more.
props to dropping consitent open mic's.
keep them coming