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Knock out kings fur life
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IP:
Have to say G got this one he came better and clearer on this one, I think his lines where more extended in this one and made it clearer for me to read but no hate to you just work on more vocab and more emotion in this one and it will be all right.
Up and up I go -
step by step I’ve crept to collect the respect
instead my head's a mess and a set of bloody toes
is all I’m left after my trek except for the steady flow
of nightmares, the flights of stairs burned into memory
destinations and the faces of people who won't remember me
after tomorrow, perhaps another chapter in the sorrow
that's known as my life and I might decide to borrow
a map, take my tracks back in the right direction
on a path to find my mind climb with a shine to rest in
the company of what comforts me nestled at the top
but I’ve gone so many floors wondering if it'll ever stop
10/10
vt george
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