Cool, you used my topic hehe...I'll give you some feedback because i know how bad it sucks if you get a no-show...

I enjoyed reading your verse because of the way you approached the topic for on, your descriptions were vivid which gave me the feeling like i was there to see everything happen. Vocab was tight, not too many complex words but not too basic either, found a nice balance. Have no bad comments to give concerning the flow and structure. Emotion was clearly present, you really felt the struggle to get his brother back home safe and sound and the love he has for him.

Solid drop!

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