Voted For: MaRVJay1009

MaRVJay1009

mah i wont even fukk up i'll just grab ya head n pull ya wig...
u suck alot of dick so ya "mouth's like ya s/n" its "full of kids"..
^haha,good opener!

stop spittin dat borin-shit..now u gon get slaughterd quick...
u oughta-quit!,tie a rope ova ya kneck n "hang" ya self like a "orniment"
^good good

ur a dyke dat like findin bitches,plus u lack ryhmin sickness....
put ya "brain on wall st." now mayb u could "mind ya business"
^hehe,2nd line was funny

100 done been in dis bitches-ass,but if u think i b spittin trash
i'll put 2 razor 2 ya face & "cutt-$¢hoðl" like "ditchin class"
^nice one!

ur hype u weak,u "dream of punches" i spit like u "fightin ya sleep"
u winnin dis battle? cum on mah datz like "bitin ya teeth"....
^aight closer

Overall solid drop, good vocab/structure n flow, had good creative punches n personals in there so no bad comments actually...good job!


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Time To Break TOOLS-IN-YA-ASSHOLE Man This FOOL-IS-A-HASTLE/
Marv Could Have A '4.0' And Still Couldnt 'Pass SCHOOL'-IN-THIS-BATTLE//
^decent opener

My Punches SPEEDING-WIT-HOOKS Cause Im BEATING-THIS-ROOK/
LEAVING-YA-SHOOKEDH He Might 'Stink' But Im Steal 'EATING-THIS-PUSS'//
^bit self-glor. but its all good

I Got VCIOUS-FLOWS Im KILLIN-FOES Beatin Me You WISHIN-HOE/
Marv Stay 'Stealing Lines' Like He 'Robbing' 'FISHING-POLES'//
^mad played actually...

FAITH-IS-NEAR You Gonna Need It I'll RAPE-THIS-QUEER/
You 'Used To Be Nice' But You 'Fell Off' Like 'M-J'S-CAREER//
^nice nice

Ya FAKE-AND-WIERD I'll Leave Ya MIND-WRECKED/
You Couldnt 'Stop School' If You Called For A 'BOMB-THREAT'//MuddaFucka!!!!!!!!!!!
^not feelin closer

Fix your structure a lil, flow was okay,vocab good...But sum stuff didn't rhyme too well in my opinion, too bad cause you had some nice punches in there, potentially hardhitting personals...had good drop but i'm feeling Marv's one a lil more...no hate though...good job from both of you!

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