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Old 01-13-05, 11:44 AM   #44
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Voted For: String9487

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look i can have cats like you hung by they name
you tryed 9487 times to be hard but you still the same
^decent opener

my words i will make you think so much they'll leave your tongue in knot
this battle will leave you parinoid like will smith in i robot
^no punch but okay

i'll leave you wit a whole bunch of dead people like a necrophiliac
and even if you wrote ya shit in brail i wouldn't be feeling that
^it'll do i guess...

i let dudes get to no my gun in the street
so they'll no that it ain't the record that skipped a beat
^first bleh,2nd's cool

just not the pencil ain't the only thing on me that hold lead
and it got the power to pop you in the head for every line you just said
^okay closer

Nothing too hardhitting in there, no bold punches or personals. Good wordplay here and there, flow was okay, structure and vocab might be improved a lil though. I've seen better drops from you, felt you kinda had too many fillers and such...No hate


String

chea,,, yo, u beatin me? i'll need some evidence flashin
dog u got truant wins, cuz their presence is absent
^okay opener

and all ya good punches, they are less than a few
and i dont eat pussey, but i'll make an exception for u
^good one

n fuck this cross dressin homo, i'll hit you in ya Vikkis
u just a peanut butta thug, i'll fix you in a JIffy
^decent decent

im startin to get pissed, u betta murk before you git it
and u couldnt beat me if u saw my verse before i spit it
^don't use same word to rhyme: big no-no!

watch me rip this clown, this shit aint hard to do
cuz Google couldnt even find a good bar from you....HOLLA!!
^google is kinda played but still good though

Also didn't have anything extremly bold in there but it seems like you put more effort into it, like you wanted it more than the other cat. Vocab was okay, structure was good n flow was nice too. Just improve a lil on your personals n punches,make them harder and such
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