v/ Final

C-BO: If you took some time on this piece, it could have been a solid drop. I liked the approach you took, but it just lacked a little bit in all aspects. You got some real potential man, just keep writing.

Final: Nice topical here, I liked the story and it was filled with emotion and imagery. You had me picture the whole scene. Vocab overall was good. Flow lacked a little bit at points but wasn't bad.