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Old 01-13-05, 09:27 PM   #9
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Voted For: Notorious Verses

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you had several multies to go along and make this nice verse flow good
you used pretty strong punches pretty strong personals you used good vocab
also
Flow From Far, Steamin Like Mars, Havent U Heard Im Known To Own "Flamin Barz"*
Dat'll Melt Yo Ice In Ya Sig, U Braggin At A Star Cuz U Ten And Four?...lol

^^^^^^^^your whole verse was great except for this bar^^^^^
you kinda fell apart there but for the most part ur verse was nice 7/10
jr freeze
not being mean but ur verse was kinda wack...your structure was terrible and you used weak personals and weak punchlines
work on structure and flow multies and punchlines/personals
ur verse was a 3/10
worste ive seen in a while
sorry
my vote..............obvious
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