The Original Half Ass King
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Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~
Well this was a very good battle that has been slept on. So Ima contribute what I can right now...
Anxiety:
Aiight lemme go peep...
kk. Well...I think you had a not bad verse. You Stayed on topic which is always good. I liked how you tied in a few multies in there. I didnt really like the ... after every line. Possibly coulda fixed up vocab a bit. Also you could have maybe centered your verse to make it look less bunched up. Also, maybe next time you could use some metas, those are some descriptive helpers when it comes to topicals...I mean they really leave a nice overall effectivness.
Props tho dawg, ima have to give you....
Overall: 68/100
Lady Fiya
Aiight Fiya, im gunna read yours here.
haha, dope...lemme break it down for ya.
Alright well you stayed on topic the entire time and so well. I didnt catch any metas in your verse as I said to Anxiety, but I think other things about yours made up for it. All your lines were almost perfectly aline which is a tough thing to do in topicals. You had a nice clean looking verse, first appearance was attractive...even with a smaller font you verse didnt look all bunched up. Very nice imagry throughout whole verse. Your vocab was pretty good too...its not always about using larger words, I feel your diction was perfect in describing the situation. Gave me a good feel of the setting and characters. One more thing, I dont usually like when topicals are divided into sections...but this style is new to me and I must say was very effective. Fiya, you hounestly did a great job and have got a lot of skillz. Keep it up cause your gettin my vote today.
Overall: 94/100
Well props to both and no hard feeling but someones gotta win and in my personal opinion Lady Fiya took this one. But hey, it aint up to me...let the votes compose a winner.
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