this wasnt really a poem cuz it had no emotion........and poems focus on emotion and this was just rhyming.....this belongs in the Open Mic forum but ill feed it anyway

flow-decent
vocab-lacking
structure-needs work.dont stretch lines
crativity-couldve been more on topic decent creativity
topic-knida played but this was decent
multis-saw some, good
get rid of the //
elevate some....4/10

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