•Para¶el•: storyline was good,stayed on topic very well. Vocab was good, had good balance between complex and basic. Emotion was there, maybe you could've had more indepth imagery. It felt as if you only gave the global look on it, didn't dug any deeper for more emotional (perhaps even personal) experiences.But overall,this was a good drop...Flow n structure were tight,described everything quite well...good job!

[b]Damian[/b: fix your structure,it'll be easier to read and feel your flow. Vocab was good, emotion was raw. Nice approach of the topic, gave some more personal views on it which I liked.Not always feeling your flow,had nice multis here and there,good imagery,vivid way to describe everything. Good drop!

This is a close battle so I'm going to go with the drop I was feeling just a little more...and that's •Para¶el•.No hate to Damian cause you had a nice verse too! Good battle people!

(can't vote unfortunately)

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