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Old 01-19-05, 03:35 PM   #17
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tight battle good verses from both...

flow-verbal abuse, i thought hells fires amount of vocab choked the flow a little bit...there was certain parts that had good flow but others were shakey and i found verbals verse to be more flowing, also because of the shorter lines that helped

imagery-Hells fire,a lot of the lines expressed imagery well and the vocab you put forth did this great, but verbal also had a few lines like that:

breached the fire hose & bent the metal...
so the hinge of the spindle wouldnt give.


^i thought that was a sick part and you wouldve got the imagery aspect if atleast half of the verse stayed like this but none the less the imagery was pretty good...

emotion-verbal abuse, seeing 9/11 with my own eyes i could relate to this verse a lot more...hells fires verse just felt like he was just talking and being very descriptive about it...there was a lack of emotion it felt like he was giving a speech about the things that happened instead of rapping or singing about what happened, it just lacked the amount of emotion verbal had in my opinion props verbal...

beginning/end-verbal abuse, thought this was good also both verbal and hell i thought went too quick into the verse... with hells fire it automatically started talkin about the wave instead of giving some insight on to what the day looked like or what was going on before the wave even approached...verbals ending i liked a lot more it had the last amount of emotion giving off to its readers thought that was good...

good verses from both but my vote is verbal abuse

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