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Old 01-20-05, 09:09 PM   #3
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Originally Posted by MADDRAPPER
Similes of Beauty

Being a Detroit creator is like the exploit of an aviator
Brain flies through plain skies get lame replies like a navigator
Look as skipper think I just shook flipper and he swims dope
Yeah script connections are like ship direction just float
Like dust on a boat, must tote a notebook and thrust quotes//
Not a prankster but like a hot gangster wanna a piece
Of the action that’ll increase satisfaction like a good feast
On a corrupt sick bid turned stick up kid “hand over the money
Or get shot in the shoulder dummy, no doe life colder and crummy”//
Attractive vapor is like active paper cats write slang on your brains
With and ink pen and you can’t think then a stink trend carries no flames
Wears a gas mask can get blast fast with wrong and strong stuff
Tear gas make you fear fast can’t breath like Fabulous can’t huff and puff//
Rhyme is a thing of hard beauty like being assigned to guard duty
Arrest those that trespass and goes break the law of flow a girl’s booty
Never have a flaw doe if she’s not a raw hoe coochee juicy and fruity//


This was good,well written, but it was more of an open mic type piece, more of a verse,with the rhymes and metaphors..rofl @ the last bar...stay up man..1
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