Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~

damn Lady fiya Im Lovin This rii Here

But N e way Back to The matter at Hand

Lady fiya
did very well Came very Flawless LOL I Never seen a structure like that on here since I dont know when but she brought some originality to this battle so thats why she gets my vote

Anxiety
You did good as well but just not good enough its like in some areas youd have my attention then other areas id be bout to go to sleep or watching TV lol But no hate mayne you did good but always remember you dont always need a good hook at the begining you need hooks all thruogh ya piece if you know what i mean ....its to hold the readers attention

Peace


PRETTY PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR I ONLY HAVE ONE BATTLE SO PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR

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