~Lyrical Nirvana~
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ummmmmm.........you need to werk on your structer..............
the vocab wasnt that good.........rhyme scheme was simple...........but it was fucked up by the structer........the content was kinda wack.....cuz its like a generic topic......but dont make your letters that big cuz it makes the structer worse..........
two words for ya........................elevate dog...............
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