Thread: Stressing Me
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Old 01-22-05, 12:53 PM   #1
Dex
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nice drop indeed my friend.

Id be damn proud if this was my work

Its like this:

The multis where there all the way thru in a great way.
Was obviously straight from the heart and it seems to me you were exloding onto text. Great emotion involved
More wordplay and metphors needed to make it tip-top but cos of the vocab high standard and multis being slapped in my face like mad i have to say this is fucking the dog's bollox!!!
The flow was well good but the structure needed a couple breaks in it to make it more pleasing to the eye. Maybe a couple more light-hearted things in it too just so we are not getting too depressed reading it But all-in-all I love it.

Stay up brother


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