Gods Of War! -yeah im one
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IP:
nice drop indeed my friend.
Id be damn proud if this was my work
Its like this:
The multis where there all the way thru in a great way.
Was obviously straight from the heart and it seems to me you were exloding onto text. Great emotion involved
More wordplay and metphors needed to make it tip-top but cos of the vocab high standard and multis being slapped in my face like mad i have to say this is fucking the dog's bollox!!!
The flow was well good but the structure needed a couple breaks in it to make it more pleasing to the eye. Maybe a couple more light-hearted things in it too just so we are not getting too depressed reading it But all-in-all I love it.
Stay up brother
8.5/10
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