i thought the flow was off try using less words to flow bette rlike 6-14 depends on the stucture if you have to use mroe to match your stucture then do so but make sure the stucutre is good but dont use so many words damn....but other den that the flow lacked so ti kinda threw me off but the emotion was good n shit the vocab was alrigth coulda used more complex words and it would of been a lil better but fo sho try usuing less words in a line to flow better..ight pz...but it was rlgith just keep working

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