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Old 01-23-05, 09:48 PM   #13
The Black Plague
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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Yo marvjay gets this, one sided battle...

Marvjay- Nice verse, first line was self braggin, but u had nice punches throughout...best lines was ya bird man line and the shyne line<< shit that rymes... aiite ya closer was wack, shoulda excluded it but rest of ya verse was nice.. good punches and a couple good lines

Cinnamon- Not bad for a noob, but you came weak... opener was decent, gave me good expectations but then u went downhill... it was just a ramblin mess with no structure or content.. a couple attempted personals, but they missed completely, and ya punches was aiite, but u didn't have many... Pretty weak here, just work on structure, and content with more personals and punches

Vote/ Marvjay1009, just had overall better verse... better punches and personals, and actually had a structure
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