ok it had alot of emotion which is what you need in a topical piece but you also needed just alittle more creativity or multis to back up on the sensory. You gained points i thought your personal and emotion put into the piece but ya have to hit it from all angles is what dj and the other kat was sayin over all i give ya 8 outta 10 but it was pretty dope tear jerker...haha big ups kid
