Aiight no real new topics faced here, I mean we see all the time people with messages about the ghetto struggle. So these days its all about the wording and emotions that can be collected from the words we use. While I liked the way you put it to an extent, however I did think you were droneing on a bit with the vocab.. A good vocab should be applauded, but the way its over used sometimes can make the peice seem pretty average.. The thing is with poetry, is you want peoples emotions to take over their thought patterns.. If their constantly having to look back and think about what a word means and why you might of used it there, then theyll have a harder time feeling the emotion in your peice..

Sorry if I seemed like I trashed your poem, because it aint like that.. I just think that vocab and imagry come very far second to emotion, which due to all the large abstrakt word useage you had going I think was tainted..

Was still a good peice nonetheless..

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