Voted For: Killa Mane

nice verses from both there.

Killa Mane: Ya open was ok. Good use of metaphor but the punch seemed not tohit with its full effect and the personal didnt pull off. But it was still better than his opener. Ya middle bar was cool, defo feelin it good personal punch that hit well. Your close was good too. Good punch, good metaphor and entertaining. Your structure was ok, a stretched line but that didnt make any difference, was still readable easily, flow was ok aswell. Nice verse bro, I liked to read it.

Dio Deus: Your opener really let you down im afraid bro. I dont think it matters where your from, battle and lethal dont rhyme. Plus i dont think the bar actually made much sense. Middle bar was ok, very basic looking, get some wordplay or multis or somethin a little more exciting into it and your laughing cos it was an ok punch. Your closer was better than the rest. You left it on a good note. Your flow and structure are good, making it easier to reaed therefore easier to follow and mark, let down by the basic-look of the punches and overall verse but dont worry bro, keep elevating and you will be real good before you know it.

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