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Old 01-24-05, 07:43 AM   #32
Dex
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textbook win here.

MarveJay: Your opener was ok. I saw the metaphor and shit i just think it came off a little weak thats all. CALIs opener was better. Closer was good but i didnt get how that was aimed directly at your opponant. Came off a little weak again. Your structure and flow were good, no probs there, some playing with words going on and a lot of metphors. The biggest problem was the lack of quality in the punches. The personals just wasnt hitting correctly. Stay up fam, sorry to piss on ya parade.

CALI: Another quality verse from one of the kings of personals. Opener started the battle by biting right into him. and the close was so hot it tore him a new limb. -See wat i did there. Your personals were heavy and hard punches were hitting bang on the target. with metas coming in too.
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