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Old 01-24-05, 10:23 AM   #15
archieDX
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Voted For: SQUAD-UP

Winna:squad-up

squad up:
like your delivery on the personals, especially:"ya winning percentage is somewhere below the zero zone
homes, ya life is on the line, like its Neo's phone". funny and true, good puns throughout, not scared to throw a lyrical swipelike the vacation line. not a lot wrong with your verse except, i would've made it longer, solid shit tho.
8.5/10 nice

Integra:
i feel you have the potential to win but i think you focused a bit too much on rhming and not enough on the size of your bars:"Someone look at his face! He got scars lookin like the burns on pieces of "burnt toast" was one of the worst offenders. but you had some good lines like: "You got a faggot name representin yo "squad"
Dawg your reputation is square, like your pink "ipod"" but then u went on that tangent about zeus's rod, which didnt help u out. think more abot your structure,try reading your lines out or something
ima give u a 6.5/10 ellevate and u could be a LOT better than this. keep it up

arch out
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