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Old 01-26-05, 01:14 AM   #3
Ysdat
Whys That?
 
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I would class this as ok.
To make this good, all you have to do is stretch your bars out.

for instance:


you muther fuckers better know my mental capacity is Like
science
I split the atom, i figured E= the speed of light
everytime im in the room,your scared to speak or type
so fake you kick back and just beef or bite
Im a human bomb,so watch your atoms get smashed
Im gonna win whether we shoot or fight
I spit raw and real,fuk a punchline
I break them,while you know tha rules
hip is in my heart,its do till i die
your rhymes are funny,like you want to be comic

feel me?
You have to fill your bars out more, so it actually makes sense.
keep dropping.return the feed.
check
~inside the brain of a maniac~
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