Voted For: SUPERVILLAIN

vote: S.V cuz ya flow was nice and u had more detail in ya verse and u got preety deep in to it, creativeness was good and all around hot...

Not only was this intense but he had 2 defend against arrogance 'n spit
He was unprepared for the hits...did i mention he was of arabic descent?
so romey left school and joined new recruits like he had somethin 2 prove
Boot camp went smooth...afghanistan got skipped and iraq was his move

^^ feeling those lines nice...

just before safety...another attack!!! moments build, more deadly...dire
they survived that, but 200 ft. from base...romey was killed by friendly fire
to romey adair...remembered as the bravest...a hero to all, so just face it
i tell his untold story below our pics, mounted respectfully in my basement

nice twist int he story and good ending...

strong verse.....


50:
it was this day where heros where made,
wars take lives but their souls did not yet fade.
They marched on for miles and took no fear,
and welcomed their enemies like headlights and a deer.
Bombs rocking in the distance and smokey lungs,
while they made their way with the sound of guns!
they faught for one thing and one cause,
and that was to give freedom and do it without a pause,
as the day grew weery they faught on to the death,
for I know that this field woul yet be their final bed.
for as I watched my comrads fall i knew that this was..
their chance to yet be called hero!

that was preety simple, good flow, no creativeness really just like a opener more then a WHOLE VERSE, u aint get deep into it which made the read preety boring, there wasnt no twist in it no real detail either all around this was preety weak...
but nice try...