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Old 01-28-05, 12:06 PM   #36
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Voted For: Pop Lotty

@ wicked clown- some of your lines were really stretched, you had too many fat jokes, it was funny tho..
so here we go:
Mcdonalds is lookin for a customer of the year, you the only candidate
fuck this fat ass, lyrics makin me laugh like chris rock in head of state
^nice opener.. the chris rock and head of the state part was a filler to close the rhyme, not too hot for that part.. but eh, not bad for an opener
its time to relate to the fact you aint shit in this world and there aint no debate
that all you create is bullshit rhymes, ya aint neva gonna make it in the game
^^hella stretched, not a good punch..
aint no fame on the way to your front door lotty, ya lifes always gonna be the same
u missed the other half of your bar.. but not bad first half
full of broken dreams and empty french fry boxes, its enough to make u wanna cry
i bet all you ever do is sit around and wonder why it is when at night u look to the sky
^seen where u were going wit this, but u didn't deliver right.. so it turned out as a bad punch
to find the answers to all ya problems you see ya lost in the 'RANKS' Shabba
fuck you bitch, no ones ever gonna know you, ya just a lyrical grave robba
again coulda been worded better, but a good attempt to name play..
stealin old ass lyrics and puns, rappin about nothin but gangstas and guns
when in real life your just a fucked up little nerd tryin to be a net thug
^^aight nice personal.. not hard hittin tho
ya get beat up for ya change when u walk into the schools halls
run home hide in the corner cryin and poundin ya flabby fists on the walls
^not a bad personal.. kinda funny too.. lol
askin god why he made you this way, why he wanted you to fail
but no single answer to you will be givin once i prevail
^^not a good bar, period.. wack fa real
comfort ya self with a Bigmac, i hear Mcdonalds is havin a sale
^wtf? where's the other half, and repeatin McDonalds again is not a good idea.. not creative

Pop Lotty:
came with str8 punches some were just decent..
but anywayz, here's the critique--
I'm gonna bring the toast to wicked, you know I'll cook em
Made his verse bleed...ready for an ass whooping
^aight opener, not hard hittin tho..
Fuck faggot, dickrider...how can you say your straight
You'll do anything for White, and it wont be cocaine
^LOL good personal and punch.. *dies* lmao
He knew you'd battle me in the future, and I'd whore em
and that i'd clown on him so bad...he made an alias for it
^another good personal, coulda been worded betta
Wanna have 9494 lines,your verse is jus a run on sentence
I knewd this be a free win, verse look like the Declaration Of Independence
LMFAO another good personal.. second half nice meta good connection lol..
Someone needs to kill you, put u in the ground dog....
...cuz ever since May 5th, RV has been on a fuckin downfall
closer kinda played.. so blah

Aight, It's pretty clear who took this battle, Pop Lotty, took this almost by a landslide, if it wasn't for his closer which was played.. WickedClown, ur lines are too stretched and your content for your punches were still not worded right.. Pop Lotty took this.. good luck..
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