Voted For: phive

Spite

I'll give you this loss cuz its not like im taking you of course,
rather bringing you close but what bother's me the most,
is how i ended your rap carreer with a POST!
^nice opener

Now your ghost, i'll toast as i watch this guy choke,
and i dont even need to pull a PHIVE JOKE
^decent bar

Arrive smoked on rap verse im a savage to step
cuz ur so wack, this win will damage my rep
^hmmm,okay

Barrage a vet ur heat is a flare to the best,
i'll cum in ur lungs n watch the baby TEAR THROUGH UR CHEST
^good good

Dare you to test but i'll beat you anyday,
so take this loss in a friendly way
cuz hey its the INTERNET ANYWAYZ!
^like closer

Overall you had solid drop in fact,your opener was best part, good internal rhyming and nice punches...was definately feeling your flow,structure might need some improvement but you dropped some good stuff.Vocab could be slightly better but nothing too bad...


phive

im makin this fool happy cuz imma battle him, soon ya smile will wipe to a grim, call me fat boy slim, cuz imma funk show brotha about ta win,//
^bit self-glorification...

yo you cant be here to watch me ruin ya shit so ill write, my rapstyles tight, i say good night, cuz i laid ya out no de(spite)//
^same as previous in fact...

yo kid you only wanted phive bars fo me ta spit, well imma give you full potential in this shit, imma leave ya hit, on the ground with a slit wrist//
^uhm,still no punch...

you cant pick up cuz yur a fag, cant fight ya way out of a wet paper bag, im droppin niggas like im playin tag, break ya leg, so dont brag, cuz ya rap style i made//
^decent i guess

time fo a closer on this fool, ya uncool, im werkin you like a tool, im drownin you like a three year old in a pool//
^good closer

You used a lot of self-glorification and some punches were sorta played,only one personal but most of your shit was better than Spite's...Flow was tight but you need to improve your structure to make it easier to read and maybe up your vocab a little to.Had some good wordplay here and there.

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