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Old 01-30-05, 09:35 PM   #16
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Voted For: Black Queen

-wow, no comp here i think, black queen, you take it, nice punches, great flow, sweet personals, had it all, perfect finisher...worked nicely, pretty good vocab, just work on that and maybe put some multis in next time, but other than that, you wrapped it up

-i dunno cinnamon, not really any structure at all, hard to tell where your punches started and finished, rhyme scheme is all outta whack, flow isnt even there....only positive, i think you came harder, you just didnt have anything to back it up, nah mean, had some multis in there as well, but no support from punches and personals....gotta elevate brah

- overall, Black Queen takes 'er by an avalanche, gj
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