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Old 02-02-05, 11:06 PM   #24
~Lady Fiya~
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Voted For: Dominate

the crowd isn't rocking, they're doubting your hot shit
a true emcee can move the crowd, but not out of the concert
^^LMFAO ha nice opener too sic..
now ya in hysterics. confused and abused from comments
and i have shook the 'fuck outta ya' like reusable condoms
^^nice meta, good punch lol
i can see it in your eyes that u dont want drama
but battlin me, i'm gonna start ya off with two l's like llamas.
^^not too hot the last line was kinda wack...
Gutter vs Dominate, i guess brawl is certain
but u know ur ass is unsafe like prison without walls or curtains
^^another good punch has arrived.. this was nice..
your verse serrated in dirt, how come u wasted ur words
shoulda been like E-40's Bentley and 'weighted your turn'
^^nice closer... dayum nice punch and meta.
Those were the favorites in your verse.

Gutter there wasn't much to critique... you had some nice lines but the way you set them up were odd..
My plan is to disrespect you and your mother. You wear a strap but it has a cup size and assorted colors./
^^i thought this was kinda funny, u coulda made an ill punch with it tho..
And you claim you a thug but you running with chumps. And your girl gettin bust like pubertity bumps./
^^^second half decent, first half aight..
Your closer wasn't hot you need to work on those more than anything.. You need to end the battle with a bang, Dominate had some witty ass punches and metaphors was sic.. good combination.. he took this by a landslide.. my vote/ Dominate..
stay up
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