Originally Posted by Nostradamus

Aiight, it could just be your quality, but it seems like your voice is muffled a bit.. And you slur a lot. Writing style kind of reminds me of Eminem, you listen to his music a bit?

Overall this wasnt a bad track, I think you could benefit from producing your stuff more than just spitting it over a beat. Sometimes good mixing can mean the difference between sounding professional and sounding amature..

Try dubbing your stuff more, maybe adding some dub effects, some end of verse effects, some chorus effects over your hooks.. Use the equalisor tools next to your volume controls on cool edit to try and get crisper sound.. And if your not already, use dynamic processing and some filter EQ's..