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Voted For: Shi-1
too easy...
shi's wordplay was definitele better than mafia's and i liked that lil cease line...lol....great way to open it up...2nd bar was kinda iffy...the other 4 bars were decent....had some humor to it... but the opener waas definitely the strongest
mafia...ya need to work on ya ideas more...all ya lines were kinda simple...that shyne line was terrible....the slept on line made no sense.... the x-box line?... d it!...you got potential but ya still need work... expand on ya ideas more and try to flip 'em a lil different... try using multi's ...it's not needed but it makes for a more complex verse and might even flow better when used properly.
giving it up to shi-1 this time for an obviously better verse
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