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Old 02-04-05, 11:02 PM   #1
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I guess I should explain more since the top 2 votes got DQed....

I liked JDOT's story better, he possess better vocab, wordplay and manage to keep good structure

JDot's best lines:

We really got no beef, just wrong place at tha wrong time
Crossed each others line, now we forced to draw nines
U could sense we don’t want war, maybe its all just stupid
But not knowing what to do, makes me wunna just lose it

D's best lines

A dark aura around my soul told me of an ominous presence/
Then appeared a lady that radi-ated a voluptuous essence/

D-cept, I think you could work on the emotions, please lose the /s in your lines, that's really herbish. And I think the main reason you lost this is because your verse was too short so yeah...

overall I voted for: J DOT

PS RTF
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