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Old 02-05-05, 06:49 PM   #11
Sean Gunner
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Hells Fire: You need to work on your topicals. They make sense, but barely. Internal rhymes were aight, but overall lacking in what I consider a topical. Vocab was ok, but it makes your topical too complicated. Flow was off a lot. Work on your spelling too. 5/10

Babylon: I couldn't help but laugh when I read this. Overall, I like how you twisted the topic, and your flow was down. Overall, work on writing more complex and in depth verses, you have 50 lines. 7/10

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