aight...heres how it all breaks down...

this was a decent verse...your creativity with the topic chosen, and ideas throughout the verse are all really good...but they wern't good enough to carry your verse...your flow could have been better...and some things were irrelevant...not irrelevant..just not important enough to put in your verse...and the things that were in there..it would have made t 10 times more potent if you had maybe rapped about some kind of event that has historical significance to the topic...but all in all..it wasn't bad...on a really positive note...you show an understanding of how this thing is done...which means your going to get really good...but return the favor please....check out..concious meets unconcious...or love letter

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