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Old 02-08-05, 04:55 PM   #26
The Black Plague
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Voted For: Judicial

Not a great battle here, but obviously Jud takes it..

Gutter- Verse was arite... shows you a noobie tho... Opener was aiite, nothin great, playin off his anme... 2nd line was prolly ya best, nice ryme, 2nd line was kinda played but decent line here...after that it went downhill.. not really any good pucnhes.. u braggin about a Benz? nigga please, keep that shit outta text battles... Last line was aiite, coulda been worded better.. i liked the guess line but like i said, worded different woulda been better.. Overall, work on complexity and punches, and more personals on ya oponent.. also, change ya struc, its fucked up...

Judicial- Not a bad verse, not good tho.. opener was arite, but jus seemed like random shit put together, tryna make a multi..keep ya opener with the rest of ya verse.. being it ya first line, we know its ay opener, dont gotta tell us... You had some decent lines, ya last 4 lines was ya best.. didn't like the "godly rap creation" line, self glorification.. like i said, last 4 was aiite, but the grave shit is played... so is the "you still not ill" shit.. i liked ya last line, best line in ya battle... hard hittin punch.. Overall, not bad... focus less on multi's and big words, and come wit harder punches...

Overall, jud takes it with harder punches, better structure, and an overall more complex and hard hitting verse...

V/ Judicial
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