nice shit yo

i like that ending..word is bond yo...good shit...just work on your structure aswell as your vocab...although you did have nice vocab you could always work on it....'

some of oyur metaphores where wack but then some where nice...i liked that farm line...but that usher line was weak.....but good shit yo....keep up the good work,.....

i was honestly feeling this story...uasually when i read something this long i getr bored but for some reason i ddint get bored of it..and for that i give this shit an A+

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