This is more of an open mic then poetry man...im feelin the emotion buttttt u didnt have to make it like u were singin the shit lol no but it was pretty tight the second verse was hot as fuck especially the openin bar mad propz maybe one day youll be as good as me

it flowed nice...the structure was good and all...the topic was a good choice...multies all the way through lol except u didnt have to underline them..there was alot of emotion flowin through out the whole peice the first verse was good but u really ripped it in the second one