Typing as I listen:

Intro sounded like you recorded it underwater - must be using a shit mic liek a computer mic. Vocals are woned by that cheap mic man - a better quality mic would work wonders with your vocal range. Lyrics are on point, the echo on the track wasn't overdone which is rare as shit on the net. Ad libs weren't over-done either. Definite plus there. Rhymescheme is still stiff - no diversity (cadence) to it really which is a letdown seeing the other strong points.

I'd say to get a mic man - even a radioshack performance mic. Work real good in your VR then put some cadence in your vocals - meaning, spit it more liek you speak. Naturally (which is where everybody's getting this "comfortable on the mic" thing) you don't speak in the same monotone style that you rap in. If you could shake that, you'd be a marketable sound IMO.

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