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Acuity- Pretty good verse... I know you explained what it's about at the end, i just didn't think it was the best way you could approach this topic... Your lines were stretched, which i guess means you could fit more in to it but i dislike that style...
Is this how it ends of everyone that has passed
As I stood in the pitch black, i took a breath andd gasped
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Best line in my opinion, i like the double rhyme in the second line, helps make the line not seem so long... Pretty good job, just not likin how you approached it. 7/10
Drama Queen- Damn girl, lovin the verse... I literally only saw one thing wrong with the whole thing, like A, your lines were stretched, you can fit a lot of shit in to shorter lines, or even make the topical longer, and make your lines shorter, i just really hate stretched lines... But you packed this whole verse so full of emotion, great job...
One thing I learned from it all,you have to stay strong
Am even thankful that my parents showed me the wrong
That was my favorite line, good job here...
9/10...
Vote-Drama Queen.
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