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I walk & walk over you
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IP:
Voted For: Parallel
Dio-
Imaginary- Your imaginary was ok, but also on the weak effect basis. Needs more like paint a Piture in your mind thing. Flow was ok. Dont stretch your lines that much.
Emotion-Weak emotion in your verse, Although the topic aint no emotional topic, still put some in it.
Vocab-In every topical verse, you need some vocab. Vocab was weak in your verse. Look up some synonms, that'll improve some vocabulary.
Paralel=-
Emotion-Blah, was weak. Didn't even have feelings in it. Felt like you was just talking.....made it boring.
Vocab-Weak also, not special words was in your verse.
Imaginary-Hmmmm, was good. I'd actually pictured your verse in my mind.
Overall=This is one whack ass topical battle i've ever seen. Paralel, you came weak man, no emotion. No vocab. You did had imaginary that's what gave you the upper-hand in this battle. Dio, keep elevating man, you no emotion in your verse. Every topical verse needs emotion. No vocab was in your verse, stretch out lines i may add. Imaginary, paralel got the upper hand in that category, which you dio didn't have any imaginary. So my vote goes to paralel.
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