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Old 02-20-05, 07:01 PM   #26
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Voted For: Buck.Shot

haha, funny battle....

Effect...
>your not dope when ya rap you sound like the pope
ya prewrite text and even when you do you choke
-okay second line, hit decent 6/10
>can't spit on a microphone your words are useless
I reck your raps and leave ya bitch mouth toofless
-nice pucnh...7/10
>your rhymes are corny like they make retards horny
you just bore me and everyone who reads ya storys
-nah, weak....4/10
>Im gonna bust shots straight through hittin ya crotch
make your heart stop then throwin in away in da docks
-another weak one....4/10
>ya fake you think ya tupac but your more clown possy
don't act tuff and bossy bitch I will make ya a pussy
-threatning him? nah....4/10
>girls walk away from you because your an ugly ass
everyday u must get trashed a rapper wid no cash
-huh....weak attempt at personal 5/10
>spendin ya whole time here like your a waste of time
afraid to commit crimes this bitch don't have no mind
-okay, 6/10
>he likes to talk shit but when he does he gets whipped
destroy cut up ABUSED! like he was an iraqie terrorist
-not bad, prolly your best bar 7/10

overall: 43/80....pretty simple verse, not really and creative, complex ideas happening here, lotta played shit, vocab pretty simple and plain weak attempts at punches and personals, all-in-all, gotta elevate this shit man...closer wasnt bad, same with the 'toothless' bar

Buck.Shot...not bad man
>Kids a 'Brit', now everybody laugh at his Spit..
Cause i seen harder shit at a Pre-teen Mosh-Pit..
-not bad, first line coulda been better....7/10
>Kid stop-it, who you foolin?, your fuckin whack.....
Get outta Line i'm snappin ya spine an you'll be walkin like a Hunchback
-haha, nice punch 7/10
>I dont know where you get it from, but your Elevated?
Like a newbie graphix head, Your ''Effects'' aint even Rated..
-another decent punch 7/10
>Ya seem ta be Hated, an you stay gettin Owned...
Its like you sold ya soul, An your constantly 'Boned'..
-okay....6/10
>Kids been whored so much, you would think he was Rich..
Everyone you ever dissed sonned you, but i'm the BITCH?
-nice personal....8/10
>When i say run, you do a Hundred Laps..
Eatin 'Tortilla' is the only time you have 'Hot (W)raps'..
-haha, i laughed at this one 8/10
>See battlin you it aint much of a Fight...
Like a construction worker bein fired, you should 'Leave the Site!'...
-got good at the end here....8/10
>Ya flows aint 'Tigh't, But i suspect thats why your a 'Whore'
Kid even called me his 'Teacher' i was his MSN Mentor!
-haha, good closer...8/10

overall: 59/80....pretty solid, you took this one all the way man....little c hoppy for flow in some places, but still easy to read....couple weak lines but had some strong ones too, last 3 bars were decent, flowed nicely....vocab was better....you 'sonned' this guy like the rest man, haha

v/buck.shot
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