Well, this verse was ok you definetly had some witty lines, some advice would be not to do much self glorification, if anything try not to put any in there.
Quote:
I got my badge on from the jury and i'm reppin it to the fullest
|
that's one line from your verse that pretty much had no punch to it at all.
Also, explaining your punches = a no no. It really takes away from your punch a whole lot. If people don't get the wit, they shouldn't be voting.
structure, it was fairly good, and your flow was decent.
Advice on that would be to leave it aligned left, and sort out the structure like that, and maybe enlarge the font a little.
Overall you had a pretty good verse. Good job fam.