Voted For: Pounds

Breakdown...

Name:Pounds

Verse:
since he 1st registerd he put his album as his own team
no release date set 4 pen 2 pad must ran out of ink
his onli decent bars camr from wen he drew a prison image
lives on rv,wen he gets da boot hell b on da street like evicted tenants
and hes made up neva had sex,from a place dat doesnt exist
used 2 human handjobs YEA!! wen a manican beats his dik
had 2 watch discovery chanell just so he can get some heart
his line count down 2 his death so at da end of his verse his funeral starts..

Need/Don’t need to work on:um...nice drop fam...work on making those punches hit a little harder, other than that its straight.

Stats...
Punches:6/10
Metaphors:6/10
Wordplay:0/10
Structure:7/10
Personals:7/10
Total:28/50
Percentage:56%

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Name:X-Cell

Verse:
IP:


(I WROTE THIS TO THE "TILL I COLAPSE" BEAT FROM THE EMINEM SHOW)
i drop "POUNDS" like jared did,gettin rid of this kid is imperative
i make u run like mascara did,take 2 steps like ciara did/
its a must,i look at him with uter disgust,ya got no purpose
abolshin u is a service,u know that i know that ya nervous/
im gonna end ya shit, u aint legit, u soo corny
the only time u come hard is when u honrey
u not talented just quit, ya flows put together poorly/
i feel possed like pacs right next to me
pound it really is best ya leave im comin so agressivley/
this pussys beat down take a seat now/

Need/Don’t need to work on:sup dawg, um...i think you need to work on connecting with your punches...dont use fake punches...they dont relate to anybody which makes it a fake verse...no hate fam..."keep ya head up"

Stats:
Punches:3/10
Metaphors:0/10
Wordplay:0/10
Structure:3/10
Personals:3/10
Total:9/50
Percentage:18%

RTF in the sig against J DOT...no hate to any of these competitors fam...pz...

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