Voted For: L.A.
Breakdown....
Name:L.A
Verse:
Opener
I'll 'Wrap' This Clown You'd THink He Was Getting Foiled,
Kid Switches From Crew To Crew, This Kid Can't Be Loyal
Body Of my Verse
He's Verse Is like Bomber-Z Saying He's The Dopest At Graphics
He'll 'Come' Hard When Tha Q And Him Watching Their Pornographics
He Couldn't Spit Tight With Hatchets He's Like Fat Kid In Gymnastics
Doing Back Flips Or Like False Magicain Doing Their Fake Hat Tricks
Like Fractions His Record Is Difficult To Read, 4-2 How When He's Whack
And Lack The Skill To Impact A Record With An Opponents Loss For A Fact
Closer
His Lines Is 'Shit' When He Whipes His Ass It Comes From Is Coll-en
This Kid's Finished I Diminished This Clown And Now I Fucking Own-Him
Need/Don’t need to work on
ont worry bro...i "i fully understand" lol....anyways...um lose the italize, thats all for now..Lol fam...keep droppin them..
Stats:
Punches:8/10
Metaphors:4/10
Wordplay:4/10
Structure:8/10
Personals:6/10
Multies:3/10
Total:33/60
Percentage:55.0%
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Name:godfather
Verse:
whats the concept of battlin'? 2 emcees CLASHING//
dissin and blows, striking out and SLASHING//
lyrically SCARRED,canibus PROTESTED to workin HARD, spittin and WRITING/
kastrdamus spat and know he INFESTED,lies prevails as yall know this 'bus emcee is forever 'BITIN',//
this is ur fucking 'bus bitch attention SEEKIN'//
the only "MIKE" u was blazing was the wack shit u was SPEAKIN//
the "spoken word" of canibus tha EMCEE,battlin' reputations UNTAINTED//
showed he was lyrically IN-EPTLY,when the true picture was PAINTED//
u a cheap lil wigger u love the ATTENTION,ur fake bling bling LAME, CHAIN weighin' down the sheer volume of ur DOMAIN//
more than ur bodys CAPACITY,now u got the AUDACITY,but behind ur computer SCREEN its TEREMITY//
all this bullshit SEEM like OBSENITY,BUT NEVERTHELESS u a dick ryding PUSSY,canibus for my MUCHIES//
ur RHYMES,SOMETIMES those LINES,they gave us a sense of de ja VU//
u COMBINE the RHYMES of others and UNDERMINE them so much u think they spat by YOU//
but i see that demand in ur face screaming out for ATTENTION,u fuckin wigger like a white rabbit on ASCENSION//
like a magicians rabbit ENLARGED ill Pull u out ma left SLEEVE,left u 'DISCHARGED' like term'nal LEAVE//
the 'DISCHARGE' of the FUNCTION, CHARRED words hittin u like traffic in CON-JUNCTIONS//
canibus the DEFIANT shouldnt fuck with kas-tra-damus the GIANT,or feel the EMOTION of COMPUNCTION//
its like im the only INTERLECTED and therefore the PRESIDENT of the lyrical EMBASSY//
spit on u and ur RESIDENCY and bottle it till u INFECTED with LEPROSY//
Need/Don’t need to work on:wassup GF...um...personally i couldnt see where you were going with this..at first i thought you were gonna tell a story..then you cam with a few hard punches...work on structure and concept fam....pz
Stats...
Punches:4/10
Metaphors:2/10
Wordplay:4/10
Structure:0/10
Personals:4/10
Multies:3/10
Total:17/60
Percentage:28.3%
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RTF in the sig fam against J dot...personally felt like i won...hope you realize the same thing...dont vote if you dont get the punches...pz..
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