Voted For: Blackmage

siris...
you came cool on this. you had some creative concepts......and nice structure (but drop the //'s at the end of your lines). your flow wasnt bad either. next time, try to add some personals. also, try to fine tune your punches a little better. they were cool, but they could've been sharper. when you get a 10 bar line limit (20 lines)...either you use up as much of your limited lines as you can, or you really shut them down in a few. you didnt do either brutha. next time, use the lines to your advantage.....and rip 'em apart (whoever it may be). please dont take any of my remarks as haterish homie, i just want to help.......word. keep up the good work. i'll keep an eye out for your future pieces.

mage...
you came pretty original. i liked your flow..........and your structure was nice (except that first line....owww! lol.) you had some pretty nice ideas that you ran with in here. right on. some of that shit was pretty funny......however, you need to fine tune your punches as well homie. your vocab was fairly decent, good job. you had some basic multies...but they worked. next time, be careful with the self glorification. alot of people dont like voting on that kind of shit (i liked it though).

good job fellas...........continue to hold it down.
(p.s.- osiris, good luck with the new crew.)

oner...


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